Essaay # 3

Metaphor essay #3

Wind

By: Harry Staley

                (TS) Wind is strong and sometimes dangerous but for the most part it is soft and gracious. (SD) I am gusty like wind. (CM) The wind goes around the world without stopping once, it might slow down but it is always still going. (CM) Like me I don’t stop ever I flow all around the school accomplishing what I can. (SD) Wind can sometimes be a pain. (CM) I am a pain sometimes to but unlike wind I will not take your papers and throw them on the ground. (CM) The wind can also interrupt a sport. (SD) The wind blows in many different directions. (CM)In life I will be making my way to different places and meeting new people. (CM) The wind will skip around different places and also run into new people. (CS) I am much like the wind in many different ways.

A strange person essay final draft

A Strange person

By: Harry Staley

9/27/10

(TS) Weirdness could be a good thing or a bad thing. (SD) I know some people who are very weird. (CM) Some of the people I know are very strange but in a good way. (CM) a lot of people I know are strange in a bad way. (SD) Strangeness is a good thing to me. (CM) I think being strange is another way of being unique.  (CM) Being yourself is what it’s all about, it may be weird but that’s ok. (SD) I know a young boy who is very strange. (CM) His name is Ian. Ian is strange because he likes to tie his face up with rope. (CM) I think this is strange because to most people would find it painful. (CS) Ian is a very strange boy but that is just who he is and he can’t change that.

(TS) In my life I have meet many weird and strange people. (SD) Out of all these people there was one that really stood out to me. (CM) His name is Ian and he likes to tie his face up with a rope. (CM) I think this is strange because to most people this would hurt, but to Ian it is an amusing event he likes to do. (SD) When I first meet Ian he was acting very strange, so strange I tried to stay away from him. (CM) I couldn’t stay away from him for long because after a couple minutes I was forced to sail with him. (CM) It was the most outrageous sail of my life. (SD)With every line on the boat he tried to tie his face up. (CM) I don’t exactly know how he did it but he did and I was amazed. (CM) I didn’t know what to think except for, what he is doing or, what is wrong with him. (CS) Of course Ian and I became close friends over the summer and now I miss his tied up face.

(TS) Ian is truly the weirdest person I know, but he is still my friend. (SD) Now that the summer is over I kind of miss his creepy looking tied up face. (CM) It looked all mangled up and his lips were all separated and contorted. (CM) He was pretty funny while he did it two. (SD) I don’t understand why he did it but when he did he cracked up every one. (CM) Some people had to leave the room from laughing so hard. (CM) He even laughed hard too. (SD) Sailing with him was the biggest pain in the neck. (CM) whenever I was steering the boat I had to try to collect myself so I wouldn’t run into anything. (CM) Keeping my self-calm didn’t always work, and whenever I asked him to stop he would say I don’t know what you’re talking about. (CS) Evan though he was a pain in the but at some time he was the weirdest funny kid I’ve ever met.

  

Final countdown final polished copy

Final Countdown draft 2

(TS) Like most kids I love summer, because you get to relax and hang out with your friends. (SD)When I hear the final countdown by Europe I realize my days of freedom are coming to an end. (CM) Summer is great but it doesn’t always last forever, which is why I enjoy it while it lasts. (CM) During the summer you need to keep up with all your work you did in the school year, so you don’t forget. (SD) If summer went on forever we would all lose interest in it. (CM) It might be fun, but it is something to enjoy when it is here, don’t get me wrong I love summer its just the harder you work in the school year the more rewarding your summer will be. (CM) Summer has to end sometime and then you have to go back to school. (SD) School could also give you the best memories. (CM) Without school there would be nobody you know to hang out with you on those hot days when you want to go to the beach. (CM)I still think that going to school is a good time and a bad time. (CS) Either way going back to school is a big countdown.

(TS)   When summer ends, don’t you always think about how great the next one will be? (SD) After a summer ends, it takes a while to get back in the swing of things back at school. (CM) It might be frustrating and also very annoying. (CM) You should always think of that one day that you were lying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school. (SD) It will always be hard to get back to school with all the changes in you’re day. (CM) I hate the feeling of coming back to school. (CM) I do not like waking up early to do work, and I don’t like when summer ends to me it’s a big count down. (SD In the summer time, “all that’s said will be done.” (SD) It is so sad when all of you’re summer friends go back to where they live to begin school. (CM) Knowing that you won’t see them for a whole year, you hang out with kids from school. (CM) Then you start a whole new bond which lasts forever. (CS) Summer is one of the greatest times of your life and the harder you work in school the better the time you’ve earned is.

(TS) Summer is a great time of year. (SD) I think summer is a great time of year but, if it was any longer I think we would all lose interest in it. (CM) Summer is great but if it was any longer we would get bored with it. (CM) I don’t think having a boring summer would be fun. (SD) On those days in the summer when you wake up and think, I don’t have to rush anything. (CM) There is absolutely nothing to get done in the summer except for your summer work, which would only take a couple days if you really buckled down. (CM) Once all the summer work is done you have the rest of the summer to relax and enjoy what’s left. (SD) When summer begins to come to an end The last thing you want to think about is school. (CM) Although you don’t want to think about it, it has to be there in you’re mind. (CM) If you totally forget about school that’s when you start to forget about what you need and you cant to that. (CS) Although the summer can be great it will be very stressing to, and that big countdown will always be ticking.

Self assessment one thing I have trouble with while writing is sticking to the topic. A strong piece of my essay is how all the words flow together. One of my weaknesses is making sure the grammar and spelling is correct. Self grade = B+.

essay #2

(TS) In my life I have meet many weird and strange people. (SD) Out of all these people there was one that really stood out to me. (CM) His name is Ian and he likes to tie his face up with a rope. (CM) I think this is strange because to most people this would hurt, but to Ian it is an amusing event he likes to do. (SD) When I first meet Ian he was acting very strange, so strange I tried to stay away from him. (CM) I couldn’t stay away from him for long because after a couple minutes I was forced to sail with him. (CM) It was the most outrageous sail of my life. (SD)With every line on the boat he tried to tie his face up. (CM) I don’t exactly know how he did it but he did and I was amazed. (CM) I didn’t know what to think except for, what is he doing or, what is wrong with him. (CS) Of course Ian and I became close friends over the summer and now I miss his tied up face.

final countdown draft 2

(TS)When summer ends don’t you always think about how great the next one will be? (SD) After a summer ends it takes a while to get back in the swing of things back at school. (CM) It might be frustrating and also very annoying. (CM) You should always think of that one day that you were laying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school. (SD) It will always be hard to get back to school with all the changes in you’re day. (CM) I hate the feeling of coming back to school. (CM) I do not like waking up early to do work ,and I don’t like when summer ends to me its a big count down. (SD In the summer time, “ all that’s said will be done.” (SD) It is so sad when all of you’re summer friends go back to where they live to begin school. (CM) Knowing that you won’t see them for a whole year you hang out with kids from school. (CM) Then you start a whole new bond which lasts forever. (CS) Summer is one of the greatest times of you’re life and the harder you work in school the better the time you’ve earned is.

Self assessment

One thing I have trouble with while writing is sticking to the topic.

A strong piece of my essay is how all the words flow together.

One of my weaknesses is making sure the grammar and spelling is correct.

Self grade = B+.

The final count down draft two

(TS)When summer ends don’t you always think about how great the next one will be? (SD) After a summer ends it takes a while to get back in the swing of things back at school. (CM) It might be frustrating and also very annoying. (CM) You should always think of that one day that you were laying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school. (SD) It will always be hard to get back to school with all the changes in you’re day. (CM) I hate the feeling of coming back to school. (CM) I do not like waking up early to do work ,and I don’t like when summer ends to me its a big count down. (SD In the summer time, “ all that’s said will be done.” (SD)  to me it is so sad when all of you’re summer friends go back to where they live to begin school. (CM) Knowing that you won’t see them for a whole year you hang out with kids from school. (CM) Then you start a whole new bond which lasts forever. (CS) Summer is one of the greatest times of you’re life and the harder you work in school the better the time you’ve earned is.

free writing #2

The pool is closing. Today we are closing the pool. It is just to cold to go in. At the begining of the summer it was very warm and refreshing. No it is just cold and gives me the chills just looking at it. The hot tub will be open all year though. That never gets cold. I like living in the basement. It is nice and cool and super quiet at night. I think having a plasma down here makes it. I call it the man cave. When i get home from school i go to the man cave, When i am doing homework im in the man cave. The only way to get into my man cave is you have to be a man or you need speciel permision. The man cave isnt anything to joke about. We stay up to the crack of dawn watching tv and playing fooseball. If you cant take it youre not allowed. I am pretty tired now. In the man cave there is a couch a big couch pointed trwards the plasma screen tv the big plasma screen tv. If you take ten steps youre in my room a small room but i have the biggest of my two sisters. They missed out.

The final count down

(TS)When summer ends don’t you always think about how great the next one will be? (SD) After a summer ends it takes a while to get back in the swing of things back at school. (CM) It might be frustrating and also very annoying. (CM) You should always think of that one day that you were laying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school. (SD) It will always be hard to get back to school with all the changes in you’re day. (CM) I hate the feeling of coming back to school. (CM) I do not like waking up early to do work ,and I don’t like when summer ends to me its a big count down. (SD) All of you’re summer friends go back to where they live to begin school. (CM) Knowing that you wont see them for a whole year you hang out with kids from school. (CM) Then you start a whole new bond which lasts forever. (CS) Summer is one of the greatest times of you’re life and the harder you work in school the better the time you’ve earned is.

Freestyle Writing

There are people all around some talking some working. I’m thinking of what to write. I don’t have much homework tonight, and Ben just stole Alexander’s computer kind of funny. Now he is on Alexander’s gmail Mrs. Owen came over to straiten out the problem, she gave Ben ten seconds on the computer Alexander counts down, ten, nine, eight, Ben rushes, Mrs. Owen said she wants to crack the whip. This assignment is fun but it will be ruined by the three math problems I have after this darn. I will get over it at least its not a hundred. Now I hear the clicking of the keyboard the faster I type the faster it goes. Alexander is sitting right next to me and Kolton is next to him. I have soccer after school should be pretty fun. I wonder what team I made, o well I don’t really care as log as I get to play. My toes always hurt went I play soccer probably from when I toe bash the soccer ball multiple times a day. Last year my toe would bleed I hope it doesn’t do that. I just cracked my knuckles, and ms rice just asked Kolton to go get his math book that he left in her room after math class. That was so fun Kolton just kept making me Daniel and David laugh he is hilarious. Alex just asked how much longer and I only have five more minutes. This is awesome I want to do this more often, its easy and I get to say what’s on my mind pretty awesome now I’m running out of things to say. What should I say, I don’t know I only have two minutes left. Any way so this is awesome I feel like singing write now ha-ha, I’m so weird but I like who I am, one more minute I am almost done I am done going to go do Spanish and math now, bye.

freestyle writin

People all around some talking some working thinling of what to write i dont have much home work tonight and ben just stole alexanders computer kinda funny now he on alexanders gmailmrs owen came over streitening out the problem she gave ben ten seconds on the computer alexander counts down ten nine eight he rushes mrs owen said she wants to crack the whip. this assignment is fun but it will be ruined by the three math problems i have after this darn i will get over it at least its not a hundred now i hear the clicking of the keyboard the faster i type the faster it goes alexander is sitting right next to me and kolton is next to him i have soccer after school should be pretty fun i wonder what team i made o well i dont really care as log as i get to play my toes always hurt wen i play soccer probably from when i toebash the soccer ball multiple times a day last year my toe would bleed i hope it doesnt do that i just cracked my knuckles ms rice just asked kolton to go get his math book that he left in her room after math class that was so fun kolton just kept making me daniel and david laugh he is hilarious alex just asked how much longer and i only have five more minutes the is awsome i want to do this more often its easy and i get to say whats on my mind pretty awsome now im running out of things to say what should i say i dont know i only have two minutes left any way so thats is awsomei feel like singing write now haha im so weird but i like who i am one more minute i am almost done i am done going to go do spanish and math now, goodnight