Body paragraph #2
The feeling of loneliness is not necessarily a noble feeling. I strongly dislike being lonely because it doesn’t bring any excitement to my life. When there is no action going on around me that is when I normally get into trouble because I get hyper and want to stir up some action. I get lonely all of the time and when there is nothing to do I always end up breaking something or getting into some serious trouble. When I get lonesome I try as hard as I can to think of the great times I’ve had over the summer, like when me and my mate Tony did backflips into enormous packs of red jelly fish and nervously laughing in pain. In those terrible times of isolation these thought are a great way to remember that I am not always secluded. I always love to think about those foolish times and wonder how terrible that could of ended up but thinking how lucky we are. Being abandoned is a very terrible but everyone has that feeling and moves right through it.
This essay was put together very well, actually!
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close to the end you started talking about you and your actions(just a little bit, though) -Eman
I agree with E, this was put together very well because it flows very nicely. I am kind of wondering about your sanity along with Tony's because backflipping into jellyfish is not very sane...... But other than that, this paragaph is awesome!
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