Quiet hero

Body paragraph # 2

An essay by Harry Staley

8th grade English

Pine Point School

January, 10, 2011

                A quiet hero is someone who always knows what to do, or someone who is just a role model for you. I have two quiet heroes, one is my Dad, and one is Atticus Finch from the book To Kill a Mockingbird. These two people are people who I think are very smart people who always know what the right thing to do is in tough situations. I hope you enjoy reading my essay on quiet heroes.

(TS) Have you ever thought of old Atticus Finch, from the book To Kill a Mockingbird, to be a quiet hero? (SD) I think Atticus is a great quiet hero because when he is put into tough spots in life, like when Tom Robinson died, he always knows the perfect thing to do. (CM)  Back in the beginning of the book, there was an old dog named Tim Johnson, and he was so old he was becoming sick and he needed to be put out. (CM) Know body in the town knew what to do except Atticus, and he came with the gun and he shot Tim to stop another problem that could have happened. (SD) Atticus was also known in the town of Macomb for being a very hard worker. (CM) I the small town of Maycomb, Atticus was a lawyer and most cases were nothing of great excitement but he works vigorously. (CM) His two kids Jem and scout sometimes get curious about what he is doing when he is working so they go into town to see him but for the most part he is just sitting at his desk hard at work. (SD) Atticus always knows what to say in bad predicaments. (CM) When Tom Robinson was killed he always knew the right thing to say. (CM) Just like every situation, “it depends on how you look at it” and that is basically how Atticus thought all of the time. (CS) Atticus was a really great man but to me it think he was a great quiet hero.

                 (TS)I think a great quiet hero would be my Dad. (SD)I think my Dad is an outstanding worker, because he does it all of the time. (CM)I compare my Dad to Atticus because Atticus is always functioning a lot and so does my dad. (CM)He always does his work on time and he almost never complains about it. (SD)My dad is also a hardworking man because he knows that you won’t go far in life if you don’t make the best out of what you have. (CM)My Dad is a super hard wage earner and he is not all about doing his work. (CM)Outside of stressing himself out about work he is a very funny man. (SD)He also does the unthinkable; he goes out of his way to make someone laugh. (CM)One time when I had a friend over my dad thought it would be funny to hit me with a soft bat… (CM)Trust me there was nothing soft about that bat. (SD)My dad is all about his family and he will do anything for his family. (CM)Joe is one of the coolest guys I’ve ever met because he loves to work but work for his family. (CM) If he was just working to work the point would be a lot less meaningful for him when he works now he has something to work for. I think my dad is a super cool guy and I love him to death and he is my quiet hero.

                Know that you have read my essay I hope that you understand why I chose these people to be my quiet hero. They are both great smart people who never give up in hard times. I know that my dad is a very hard worker, and Atticus sounds like he is a very hard worker. I think both of these people are great quiet heroes.

Self-assessment:

One issue I am trying to keep focused on is to keep myself on task, and to stick to the full assignment.

One strong thing I see in this essay is that I really tried to focus on punctuation.

One week point in my writing is making myself do everything that is required.

Self-grade: B-