(TS)When summer ends don’t you always think about how great the next one will be? (SD) After a summer ends it takes a while to get back in the swing of things back at school. (CM) It might be frustrating and also very annoying. (CM) You should always think of that one day that you were laying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school. (SD) It will always be hard to get back to school with all the changes in you’re day. (CM) I hate the feeling of coming back to school. (CM) I do not like waking up early to do work ,and I don’t like when summer ends to me its a big count down. (SD) All of you’re summer friends go back to where they live to begin school. (CM) Knowing that you wont see them for a whole year you hang out with kids from school. (CM) Then you start a whole new bond which lasts forever. (CS) Summer is one of the greatest times of you’re life and the harder you work in school the better the time you’ve earned is.
This essay is pretty good because of the grammar and how you stayed to the topic sentence . I feel the same way about summer ending too. I will miss the freedom and late bedtimes. You could have added more references to the song 'The Final Countdown' by putting in a phrase from the song that is similar to your feelings on summer ending. Other than that, good job. :)
ReplyDelete"You should always think of that one day that you were laying on the warm soft sand thinking I might never go back to school" I totally agree. Its a great paragraph altogether. I also agree with E because I don't see many ties to the song. Great work Harry. [:
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