Quiet hero
Body paragraph # 2
An essay by Harry Staley
8th grade English
Pine Point School
January, 10, 2011
(TS)I think a great quiet hero would be my Dad. (SD)I think my Dad is an outstanding worker, because he does it all of the time. (CM)I compare my Dad to Atticus because Atticus is always functioning a lot and so does my dad. (CM)He always does his work on time and he almost never complains about it. (SD)My dad is also a hardworking man because he knows that you won’t go far in life if you don’t make the best out of what you have. (CM)My Dad is a super hard wage earner and he is not all about doing his work. (CM)Outside of stressing himself out about work he is a very funny man. (SD)He also does the unthinkable; he goes out of his way to make someone laugh. (CM)One time when I had a friend over my dad thought it would be funny to hit me with a soft bat… (CM)Trust me there was nothing soft about that bat. (SD)My dad is all about his family and he will do anything for his family. (CM)Joe is one of the coolest guys I’ve ever met because he loves to work but work for his family. (CM) IF he was just working to work the point would be a lot less meaningful for him when he works now he has something to work for. I think my dad is a super cool guy and I love him to death and he is my quiet hero.
This is a great Essay i think. i believe there was one part that could have used capitalization. it was also good how you combined your dad and Atticus in the same paragraph!
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