The Wind
The different sides of the wind and I
An essay by Harry Staley
8th grade English
Pine Point School
October 4, 2010
By: Harry Staley
Nothing can stop the flow of the wind as it changes direction and strength, but rarely stops moving. On one hand, the wind pounds strongly during a storm when the waves are crashing against the rocks. On the other hand, the wind blows very beautifully on a cold fall day when the leaves are falling. It can even scoop down and grab a leaf off the ground and throw it around the yard, while the leaf becomes part of the wind and soars and glides like a plane. I am like the wind because I like to keep moving.
(TS) The wind blows strongly and sometimes dangerously, but for the most part it moves soft and graciously. (SD) I am gusty like the wind. (CM) The wind wafts around the world without stopping once; it might slow down, but the wind currents are always still traveling. (CM) Like the wind, I never stop. (SD) I cruise around the school energetically trying to accomplishing what I can to get to where I need to be while traveling around the halls and walkways. (CM) Sometimes the wind can cause damage by taking my paper and scattering them around campus. (CM) The papers soar like a white dove in the violent breeze. (SD) The gusty wind blows in many different directions as the day goes on. (CM)I feel that sometimes I will blow in many different directions as the day goes on and I learn new things (CM) Sometimes when I am inside of a class I feel the energy building up inside me like the trees rustling in the wind. (CS) I am like the wind.
At the end of some days the wind might slowly slow down. At the end of my days I slowly become tired and go to sleep. The winds strong puffs will slowly become a soft breeze and turn into a little waft of wind brushing against your skin. Once you are in bed sleeping the wind might start up again, but it also might become even softer. After your long day at school you start to fad,e and the wind also starts to fade
"After your long day at school you start to fad,e and the wind also starts to fade" In this sentence there are 2 puncuation errors.
ReplyDelete1. "start to fad,e" should be "start to fade,"
2. At the end of this conclusion there should be a form of punctuation like a period
But other than these simple mistakes, GREAT WORK!!!! n__n
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